According to the article, the main idea is about a guy who committed suicide because of being invaded his privacy. Basically, 18-year-old Tyler Clementi jumped from the top of the George Washington Bridge into the Hudson River due to the two Rutgers University students’ invasion of privacy charges with webcam. Without someone’s approval, it would commit a crime in New Jersey if somebody shares or looks at sex acts of someone. One of the co-director said that event happened not because of technology but inhumanity. People are used to doing or saying something in cyberspace that is far from the real world but nowadays, the internet seems like reality not only in several places but also for the rest of the world. But cyber bullying can affect the inner mind that can feel worse than outer wounds as cyber attack can get a big audience and it can forever haunt the victim. Clementi’s death is one of many current instants of young bullying people leading to that kind of end.
As my opinion, I strongly disagree that the internet is reality because how we can say it is real without seeing in the face-to-face or without talking with each other ordinarily. If people don’t have eye contacts cannot judge their faces, how can we know whether they are saying the truth or not? The fact that people do everything on online or chat with their friends seems like reality but actually it is one of the artifacts. So some people misuse the internet in order to do cyber bullying such as plain being mean, defamation and so on that is not good for anybody. Some people use the net as a kind of obstacle such as if they lie or they do or curse somebody bad things, the other side can do nothing. Thus maybe some people are very fond of communicating each other in the net. I experienced an unforgettable event in my life. When I started using the net when I was young, there was someone who I got to know in the net. Every time I used the net, he was there so we accidently spent a lot time having a small talk. He told me about everything of him including his age, his hobbies and so on. Later on, I got to know that he laid a lot of his biography. When I dated him outside to make sure everything I know, he always refused to come and never showed up. Eventually, I took lesson on it and got to understand that the net would never be reality at all. It is true that the net is one of the artifacts in our world.
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ReplyDeleteI like your example that you use and the details you give. The experience you wrote relating to the article was very great. You did really good job on writing your summary and explaining what happened in the article. I like how you stated that you disagree to what the author was saying. I like you used "As my opinion" it shows your separation from the author's thought to yours.
ReplyDeleteYou could of relate more of the reason why you think internet is a reality.You could write more details and be more specfic on your main point. The main point that you use is kind of confusing and unclear and it should be used earlier. I think you wrote too much in the second paragraph. You dont stick to one topic. Your topics goes from one to the other without enough details.
You could have use more paragraphs and more points to support your thesis. Some of the statment you wrote, you should have used quotes to support you details. You get off topic when you are writing your main point. You are too general and you dont use enough examples.